Colleen at Wordcraft poetry suggested this prompt today: to write a shadorma using 3-5 selected words. Syllable count is 3-5-3-3-7-5. I think I used 8 of the words, but I am writing the poem on my iPad in this post so I can’t go over the word list again.
This spring month,
not yet hot, cloudy
I walk with a book and grapes
and wish spring to last.
I hope you enjoyed that, especially knowing how hot it will get here in Arizona by mid-May. I am lying on my back with this iPad because I am resting my legs. For over ten weeks my right leg has been a monster. Saturday I had an MRI, but I’ve had other tests with no diagnosis or idea of what’s wrong. So why did I write about walking? For one thing, it’s a word on the list. But I can and do like to do light walking with the leg issue. But then I have to rest it. And the leg prefers very limited sitting (at the computer).
Serena Agusto-Cox on Savvy Verse & Wit has written a great review for my Red Riding Hood chapbook Our Wolves: https://savvyverseandwit.com/2023/04/our-wolves-by-luanne-castle.html She argues that the poems are not retellings of Red Riding Hood. Read her review to see what she says they are.
37 responses to “Spring Walk: #TankaTuesday”
Nice poem, Luanne, I hope your leg feels better soon.
Thank you, Jennifer. I am starting to lose my patience :/.
A Book and grapes. Who could ask for anything mire? Super poem, Luanne.
Thank you, John!!!
It probably is a perfect temp there about now, I would guess. Bummer about the leg. I hope you get an accurate diagnosis soon!
It’s going to be cool this week, but then it will go up to 90. But right now, I think it’s so nice. As far as the DX goes, ME TOO! Thanks, Eilene.
I enjoyed your spring poem, Luanne. I hope the docs can figure out what’s going with your leg so that it doesn’t give you any more trouble. Congratulations on Serena’s very insightful review of Our Wolves!
Thank you, LIz, on all counts! Much appreciated!
You’re most welcome, Luanne!
Nice poem, Luanne. I hope you get good results about your leg problems. Not fun.
Thank you. And thank you! No, not fun at all.
Book and grapes! Such a wonderful combo!
It really is!!!
We don’t get grapes here until summer, but I’m looking forward to it! (K)
We have them now.
I love your poem, Luanne, and hope the doctors fix your leg issue so you can enjoy walking freely again.
Yvette M Calleiro 🙂
Thank you so much, Yvette! I found out that I have a torn meniscus, but don’t entirely know what that will mean yet.
Knowing the issue is the first step in solving it. Sending healing energy your way, Luanne! 🙂
Thank you so much!
Luanne, you really pull me in with the walk with book and grapes.
Thank you so much! Yay, we can go for a walk together!
I enjoyed your poem, Luanne!
I looked up torn meniscus. Wishing you a full and speedy recovery, and sending healing thoughts your way.
I love the poem! I’m so sorry about your leg. I hope you get a proper diagnosis soon and some relief.
Hi Clare! Thank you so much. Happy Easter!
And to you xoxo
I love walking too, Luanne. Have you tried support hose for your leg? Since I sit so much, I stared wearing the knee-highs and my legs feel so much better. I walk around two+ miles a day on my treadmill. When I lived in Arizona, I was up at 6 am to walk every morning, so I know you must miss it. I hope they find what’s wrong. As we age, we have to try different things to see what works best for us. 💜
Yes, no way can I do that now. Interesting you should mention support hose. I’ve worn them since I was 29 for primary lymphedema (and they are the highest pressure at 30-40 because that’s what is used for LE). So while they probably did help at first, they became a real problem with the knee. I reduced to 20-30 weight and it is actually much better. They were acting as a tourniquet until I did that! I wear the knee highs, too. They are the best!
LOL! This journey to getting older is always an adventure. I’m glad you’re wearing the hose. They really help. 🙏🏻
You’re so welcome. I hope you’re feeling better.
Oops Happy Easter!!!
This is lovely, Luanne ~ a book and grapes is a wonderful combination!
Thank you so much, David!
Hi Luanne, I am so sorry to read about your on-going leg issue. I would have expected the MRI to reveal something. I enjoyed your poem. I didn’t think Wolves was a retelling of Red Riding Hood but rather that Red Riding Hood, a well known children’s story, was a platform for your poetry about life, love, deception, and manipulation.